Leave is in the air… a poem, care to comment?

Question

Leave is in the air

By Jellz Fisher 072608

I wonder if Edwin Hubble’s

wife left him because

….she needed space.

Was he not focused

on their relationship

or in fact too far sighted?

George Ferris’ wife

Didn’t hang around long either.

She was heard to say

“The carnival is over,

it’s been a

rollercoaster journey,

I’m sure it will

turn out for the best”

We’ll see about that.

G and L Norman

made the cut too.

The wedge between

became too wide.

They joined

“Club Holy Matrimoney”

It’s an irony

that they would.

For them it was only

a good short game.

Answer 1

Great poem. I love it. Keep up the good work!

Answer 2

I really like the poem.  I think it's extremely CREATIVE and ORIGINAL.  Excellent.

Answer 3

Who says poetry can't be funny? Poems can be a range of all human emotion.

Answer 4

Quite a nice poem, With some work and some words substituted, It might flow a bit more, but You might want to leave it in its original form in order to preserve the feel that you were going to, also, have you ever thought about making a song Based on this poem, it might go well, but for now, take it easy and keep em coming...

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Answer 5

Your ironic sense of humo(u)r brightens my day.

Answer 6

I couldn't stop laughing - that line "she needed space" was priceless.  You have brought wit with joviality. Thank you ♥