Leave your thoughts to yourself...Leave yourself to your thoughts...-Read My Poem-?

Question

Leave your thoughts to yourself

Leave yourself to your thoughts-

Stop letting their image of beauty corrupt-

The world is much bigger then our tiny self-

We need to look past just the face and the wealth-

Green paper don't phaze me-

Your image of class-

I'd rather speak honest-

Even if they may laugh-

Answer 1

Good start, weak finish..."phaze" is "phase"...I'd suggest editing after line 5.  The poem's concept is fine...just work on its execution...and keep writing

Answer 2

I love it. Bloody brilliant! So evocative and the imagery? Wow! Wonderful work...thank you for sharing!

Answer 3

Wow, very good. Short and sweet and to the point. I would have to agree that you do need a more powerful ending to go with this poem, but other than that you state your opinion wonderfully, and I feel where your coming from. Keep up the good work!