Listen to my song and tell me what you think?

Question

hey so i just asked this, but heres the lyrics. its not done and i recorded it quickly but just wanted feedback!

thanks

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cmJbm6ojmck

LYRICS:

saw our picture on my wall

just a frame filled with me and a stranger

such a short amount of time

for you and me to go from happy to in danger

so listen as you turn your back to walk away

even if its the last thing that i get the chance to say

as time goes by there builds a gap in the line

in the chain

from the pain

between you and me and what we used to be

hope you considered that there may be no fix

no repair

nothings there

to bridge that gap of empty time

empty chair across the table

your the missing person

but im not missing you

only wish that you hadn't changed

and that we wouldn't be left like this

so listen as you turn your back to walk away

even if its the last thing that i get the chance to say

as time goes by there builds a gap in the line

in the chain

from the pain

between you and me and what we used to be

hope you considered that there may be no fix

no repair

nothings there

to bridge that gap of empty time

Answer 1

I didn't like the very beginning at first because of the sound quality, but once it got a little more upbeat, I was like, I like this part. I'm not sure what the camera was focusing on, but I would have preferred to be watching a live performance, I think it would've added something to it. I come from a family that are in the music industry. I have a cousin who has his own record label (www.TWizYRECORDS.com) & he has CD's out in the stores, but he does mostly hip hop. My cousin said to never give up on your DREAMS: The World iz Yours!

Answer 2

WOW

yeah...WOW

Answer 3

Wow. It's really good. There isnt really a good sound quality on your camera, but that's understandable. But seriousoly, it's SOOO good. You have a nice voice too :)