Look at this poem? Please?

Question

Well i wrote this poem in like 5 minutes but i just wanted to see what you thought. I really dont like my father cuz he thinks everything i do is wrong and constantly b*****s at me and yeah you get the point. Anywho i cry about it a lot cuz well he makes me cry. So anyway please read this poem and tell me what you think. =]

I’M SORRY

I’m sorry I’m such a burden.

I’m sorry I’m not smart.

I’m sorry I’m always sad.

But mostly, Daddy, I’m sorry I made you mad.

I’m sorry I’m a smartass.

I’m sorry I’m a teenager.

I’m sorry I’m not what you wanted.

But mostly, Daddy, I’m sorry I made you mad.

I’m sorry I’m not perfect.

I’m sorry I’m myself.

I’m sorry I’m your child.

But mostly, Daddy, I’m sorry I made you mad.

I’m sorry I don’t always listen.

I’m sorry I have a life.

I’m sorry you have to deal with me.

But mostly, Daddy, I’m sorry I made you mad.

So in conclusion, Daddy,

If you really want to change me.

Just go right ahead Daddy

That way

I won’t make you mad

Answer 1

The poem reveals a lot about how your father is hurting you.  I'd leave it somewhere that he would be likely to find and read it.  Perhaps he will realize how much he is hurting you if he sees this poem.  Take care.

Answer 2

I write poems, and I really like reading poems too.

I think this poem obviously describes you/ how you feel and maybe if your father is so mean to you, you should talk to your mother. Or, maybe you should show this poem to your dad. I really hope it would go well, and I really like this poem.Maybe you should contiune writing... but on a different subject. I wish you well.

Answer 3

i think its good for self pity. no offense. but...it seems that this is going to affect you for a long time. i know exactly how you feel ive written that same poem too.

be strong. be confident in yourself. do what you do best and ignore those who dont like it.

things really happen for a reason

Answer 4

First of all

you are being hard on yourself

No one is perfect

Next part

there is alot of apologizing

what needs to be done

is assess what is wrong in life

think positive of the good things.

No one is perfect

but you wrote this poem wonderful

Everyone goes through

being a teenager

then being an adult

Each of us are special in our own ways

and you are no different.

Some people can be a burden

but I will try harder to be smarter

so you can be proud

could we talk so I am not so sad

To Daddy I don't want to make you mad

I will try not to be a smart-aleck

Please help me so I wont irritate you

If you didn't have a life you wouldn't have done

this poem.

Answer 5

I am sorry but this is too average and repetitive.  Look at my poems

Answer 6

I remember, a very long time ago, writing almost your very words.  Keep writing, always remember that "this, too, shall pass"  Most importantly, remember Shakespeare.  "to thine own self be true"  Be your own beautiful and authentic self.  Be patient with yourself and your Dad.  Follow your bliss.