Looking for some honest opinions on a song I wrote?

Question

Falling down, I hit rock bottom

To me this is the end it seems

Closing my eyes I feel it.

I feel death's cold embrace upon me.

Darkness fill this empty void,

As I close my eyes

You are still whispering

Nothing but hatred and lies into my ear

Brace yourself

This isnt the end

It's only the start

To a new beginning

Waking from the chill of death

I stand enlightened

Pushing my way out of this coffin

Hearing your voice only drives me

You think you have won

Little do you know

This has just begun

Brace yourself

This isnt the end

It's only the start to a new beginning

(A Start to a new Beginning)

Brace yourself

For here I come,

Ready to give it all

For you have not won till this is all said and done

This has just begun

(A Start to a new beginning)

This has just begun....(fading)

Answer 1

Yes that would work, I would go for it!!!

Cheers!!

Answer 2

It's a bit dark, to my opinion, a bit too dark