Love Note #1... Do you like summer rain?

Question

Love Note #1

then lay with me

on summer grass

beneath the sun

and sprinkles of rain...

while I watch

the rain pour over you

I am aware

of my desire

for a moment...

to be the rain that soaks

through your clothes

and covers your body...

Answer 1

hey its really good, is do you like summer rain the name of the poem? your first line should be do you like summer rain, it fits and its cute

Answer 2

Steamy , and descriptive , yes I loved it!! Good job!! Cheers!!  Very seductive !!

Answer 3

I'm made of ice, please stop melting me.  You got any more like that?

Of course I liked it, it was gently erotic.

Answer 4

Love the imagery, the poem seems as though its starts in the middle, which I don't know if that's what you wanted. But I truly enjoyed this read. That's my new line to use on my boyfriend. haha.

Answer 5

It is simple, short, but lingers with the thoughts of what beauty the raindrops would caress. I do enjoy this poem very much, the simple nature strikes me with a bad impression at first but it is much more then simple when you have opened the door to allow for the readers mind to drift into thought. It is beautiful. If you make changes let me know.