MY Poem please tell me what you think. please critique?

Question

Laying in my bed counting the sheep

trying to shave them as they go by so i can sleep

I lost count because I don't know any numbers

I started thinking of my ex instead that likes cucumbers

oh how I hate her.

So I started masturbating instead I'm such a masturbater.

Then I finnaly feel asleep

then I heard a car beep and woke up again

yay it was morning.

Answer 1

It suxed I'm gonna hit you witha hamster for makingme read it

Answer 2

Your totaly very interesting

Answer 3

umm i would make some improvments. like

laying my my bed counting the sheep

*one by one. its hard to fall asleep

*i lost coun t because i forgotten the numbers

*i thought of my ex, that kept me from slumber

then i fell asleep

*i heard my alarm clock beep

yay it was morning

idk thats what i would do but i kinda like the idea of it

Answer 4

You can take us a better poem. I know it.

Answer 5

honestly.....

Answer 6

This one is significantly worse than the last.

Answer 7

DRUGZ?

Answer 8

You know it isn't good, you want a reaction-Looks like you got one. I don't claim to be a great poet but I think I can say will all certainty that this is really bad

Answer 9

slightly weird, but that can sometimes be a good thing.