Maybe I shouoldn't have gone there?

Question

So Sad I Am

The hole in my soul

Tears I can’t control

How to pay this toll

The cost of what she stole

No more possessions

Useless confessions

Misguided obsessions

Whirlwind directions

As anger depletes me

Minute goals defeat me

This hunger eats me

Lost what completes me

Where do I begin

What waits if I win

Why bother again

When will this end

Not a good day to be alone

©rad122206

Answer 1

too late.  

what completes you is not

in the pain that you've bought

dig deeper, say i

for that which you try

cannot be found

in the earthly bound

tis illusion to think

that youve stood on the brink

when all that youve lost

is merely the cost

of a trinket or two

what remains

is you

clarification needed here

i apologize...not intended to trivialize but only to point out that the most importanat thing...yourself....is intact .  ty for words well spent.  :-)

Answer 2

S.2, the story of my life.....

Answer 3

This is a good exercise piece. The meter is stronger than the rhyme. You have the beat, naturally. Now, in the Burmese style, back the rhymes up one word in each successive line, then go back around:

*****

As anger depletes me

Minute me, defeated

Me, the hungry

Eats me

Lost complete me

*****

Answer 4

OMG.....Bravo!!!!!!