Mi frn and me made a poem is it good or bad ?

Question

thats it below ...

Through all the pain and through all the fights

Your smile can brighten up the darkest of nights

While your eyes shine as bright as the moon

Just know my love will never gloom

My heart is crushed, my soul is torn

I hope our love will be re-born

As a mirror shatters my faith is gone

Maybe our love will battle on

I cannot take this pain inside

Why must you throw our love aside

My life is passing before my eyes

Dont shead no tears or say good-byes

Answer 1

Overall well written, nice flow and I love the imagery, i do however notice that your thought line is jagged and I find that the reader has to skip your thoughts to get to the point behind the words.

Answer 2

Yes it is very good, u have a good poetic element in it, u also have good similes and metaphors!