My 13 yr old daughter wrote this poem yesterday, could you please critique?

Question

she picked out the structure and effects for the visuals too

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eX0hOOpAeho

Answer 1

Very good.****

Answer 2

Good.

Answer 3

"Hi!"

"Wowweeee", very creative and well written. Your daughter is highly talented especially at 13, be proud. : )

Answer 4

WOW very good she has a true gift.

For 13 she has one powerful look on life.

Encourage her to take Any advantage of any classes on poetry possible.

Answer 5

poem was intresting,bt if could have put some  little effort,it used to be the better than good

Answer 6

a good perception of the world

Answer 7

seems to be taking after her mom, it was like an under water journey unknown while what lays outside from it is unknown as we destroy what they don't know

Answer 8

http://br.video.yahoo.com/watch/2946198/...

que usted no es el siguiente a la línea

that you are not the next one to the line

Answer 9

Great, You have a whole family of talented ones . It speaks the truth or knowledge and that's wonderful coming from a generation that will replace us, keep em coming!!! Love it.

Answer 10

Lovely way with words for someone so young.....perhaps she could get it published in a poem book.

Great structure & timing.

FAB

Answer 11

good poem! i actually thought it was kinda good...

Answer 12

Very nice....but scary

Answer 13

5*

Very good.

Tell her shes very creative and is to write more poetry!

Answer 14

This poem is a search and a finding of nature. A reaching to the depths. A revealing of who and what we are. Well done, I enjoyed this poem

Answer 15

Nice one!