My 2nd poem?

Question

they are poems not songs just to let you no :)

I not intend to give them to anyone or have i based it on my own exsprince I just take a situiation and wite about it

It’s a year to the day

That you vowed to stay

A promise to be here through thick and thin

But how wrong could I have bin

I thought you were the one

But now you are gone

You did not even say goodbye

You just left me to cry

Every day I look up into the sky

Trying to find that reason why

Why did you leave me why did you go?

You could not even take the time to let me know

Everyone thought I was a fool

But they did not no what you meant to me

But onerously they good see

The truth behind the mask

That you were really a hopeless task

You coward

Was this all a plot?

I took you into my life

And this is the thanks I got

Answer 1

Situation About my Wife:

I see there was an anniversary

celebrated here.  

You were recalling the vows

and promises.

Like the one that she would stay

Suddenly things went wrong

because you thought she was the person for you

I sense betrayal because she up and left you

without saying goodbye.

She left you to cry

with you wondering why

That is where I thought she died.

I know better, and I realize

Either way you are going through pain

You are not to blame

The last two lines

are painful for sure

I took you into my life

this is the thanks I got.

Answer 2

better than pie

Answer 3

That is bloody brilliant. I love it. You really have such an evocative talent. Thank you!

Answer 4

You need to invest in a dictionary. Also, the rhyming is very remedial.

Answer 5

You need more grammar check very good you don't want to make it ryhme to much poems don't have to ryhme its like free verse you might want to add a little more imeragy and a little expostirory but I love it.

Answer 6

well it was great

Answer 7

your good you have talent

Answer 8

wooow thats realllll deep hun.

its reeeeally good :-)

Answer 9

I liked it from start to finish.