My E-mail to ask guy out! Proof read please! Does it sound okay? I'm 22 he's 21?

Question

subject: just saying hi again!

hey Adam!

I just thought i'd write u another e-mail to see how you're doing! I'm not sure if you'll get to read it soon but hopefully you will!

So how are things going? good I hope! it's been awhile since we last "talked", ha!

Did you see The Dark Knight movie?? I did and I thought it was pretty good! Long but still good!

oh yeah, have you listened to the new coldplay cd yet? i love that song viva la vida!

sooo..hmm..

I was just wondering....

Do you ever come up to visit Akron??

Hopefully you don't think I'm a weirdo but I think it would be fun to hang out sometime!

so anyways...

it's too bad you don't have the internet! you're missing out on the all the fun of myspace and youtube! All those richard cheese paradys are HILARIOUS! ;-)

hopefully you get to check your e-mail soon! =]

Answer 1

I think it sounds fine kinda sweet and shy but still to the point which I like. I think it's good.  

Answer 2

I could make suggestions and so could everyone else ("you" instead of "u", etc.) but it'll come off as different from you. Be yourself and send what you believe in. Why not say all of this in person?