My Gifted young poet poem, Comments?

Question

One day I tried to write a song

But all the words they came out wrong

I got so mad I threw my pen

I don’t know when I’ll try again

I tried so hard some lines to share

But all the words they go no where

Seems all these lines from a thought

To write them down its all for not

Oh what the h**l there’s more to do

For my pen and me for now we’re through

I’ll go outside and ride my bike

And to the park and then I’ll hike

And there I found a big rock wall

With scribbles there for one and all

I said some thoughts that kind to mind

Then someone calls me from behind

A voice says if you are a poet

Practice more your words don’t show it

So I read his lines as best I could

With misspelled words this kid is good

So how could someone half my age

Be that good command the stage

And then he left as fast he came

Like rhyming words was just a game

I come back every now and then

Hoping we meet up again

I leave some lines for him to see

He changes them he sets them free

Answer 1

My jaw literally dropped lol this almost made me cry I really really really liked it. I'd give it a 10+

Answer 2

Great poem! I loved the story it tells. I liked the fifth and sixth stanza!

Answer 3

gary

You did a beautiful job with this poem

but I see frustration

the first paragraph says it

I can see however you did not give up

writing this.

If at first you don't succeed gary

you need to keep trying

The fifth paragraph say something like

practice

I have to admit you did a beautiful job here

Answer 4

well: it is perfect  "Poetry " I has read some by Robert Frost

an Famous Author he Answers Arts &Humainites

Answer 5

Its Great!

Answer 6

I really like it.