My Poem: Writers Block. Please review it.?

Question

Why does the page stay blank

and stare at me

my pen does move

nor will it construct those elegant words again.

The creativity has vanished

leaving behind a text of emptiness.

My conscience is a blurr,

and is wandering through my mind without guidence.

I can sit for hours,

days,

weeks,

with the white glare of the computer screen

shining into my eyes,

burning them, and forcing them to cry.

I turn over the empty pages,

I look over the story unwritten,

and there is only one thing that I can say...

the end.

Answer 1

I liked the poem I thought that it was pretty deep, I still don't feel that the poem is over so I would add in another paragraph before your last one. And yes it's ok that you have writer's block this is a common symptom for any writer regardless of their age.

Answer 2

Our minds are like rivers of consciousness and occasionally the thoughts we want to uncover get caught in little eddies.

I find the best cure is to get out and do something physical for a while and leave the problem alone. Very often it comes free of its own accord.

Worrying about it rarely helps.

Age is irrelevant, it's what you do that counts. Alexander was 15 when he ruled half the world.

The poem needs work but don't sweat it.

Answer 3

Sounds kind of grown up to me and I like your poem.  I can detect no writer's block.

Answer 4

I think your poem is great...and dont worry about people that say poems have to be rhythmic cuz they dont so you can keep urs the way it is...and yes writers block is totally normal at any age

Answer 5

i think this is excellent!

Answer 6

passable. but do make the poem more artistic and appealing. poems are supposed to be rhythmic. still, nice job! there's more room for improvement.  

Answer 7

1. It's good. It describes writer's block really well.

2. Yes, it's normal! I'm 14, and I go through the same thing all the time!

Answer 8

the poem has an interesting inspiration or theme.  It does need some editing, but that's not a huge deal.

I'm sure writer's block happens with no regard for age.

Answer 9

I think this poem is one of those poems that are meaningful and deep, but i do prefer poems that rhyme. I just think their a little more enjoyable. If you can take the meaning of that poem and add a rhymes it would truly be a work of art.  

Answer 10

That is a writers block U have described. And yes it happens to every body.The poem needs some work. For a 15 yo, it is a good start. keep on writing poems, when U have a writers block on stories. Good luck.

Answer 11

This, from a 15 year old?  Well done, my boy! and sure it's normal!

I'm 58 and here's one I wrote about the same thing, is this how you are feeling?

Answer 12

Great job, you should really submit it to http://www.papertank.com and see what they think.

I bet you could get a high rating for it on there!