My first Cinquain poem.?

Question

"Hi!"

Please view and critique my Cinquain poem.

Cinquain: is a short, usually unrhymed poem consisting of twenty-two syllables distributed as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, in five lines.

Line 1: Noun

Line 2: Description of Noun

Line 3: Action

Line 4: Feeling or Effect

Line 5: Synonym of the initial noun.

Poem Bellow.

poems,

expressed feelings,

flower of zinc paper,

scenery flows through written words,

verse form.

Answer 1

It sounds very good to me! I never knew that flower of zinc was a name of certain ink...you learn something new everyday! Good job

Answer 2

Making a pencil a flower, is really out there. It made me think of one of those pink pencils with a red hairy toy at the end. Those things make me laugh.

It could be better. Its good, but not the best.

Answer 3

Your poems are unique. You are talented, creative, and seem to be intelligent.