My first stab at poetry...What do you think? I'm 15 btw =]?

Question

I know already people will comment saying it's too depressing and everything, I know it is, 'cause that's how I felt at the time!

Now tell me without commenting on how depressing it is, what you think of it.

Don’t be afraid

I get a crush and I am crushed.

I fall in love and with me, love falls in hate.

Still with anxiety I wait and wait,

But steadily I die; it’s far too late….

For it takes less than death for one to die,

Can’t you see you’ve killed me inside?

And I’ll suffer inside grasping for air,

Love’s heart will never hear my prayers

It was you, not them, who left me there

I’ll never blame the ones I hole dear

Just this perfect love that leaves me here

I’ll cry these eyes until they’re dry of tears

Then when time comes to save me,

I’ll realise the reason why I’m here

For love’s greatest enemy is fear

I’m so scared of love that I’ll remain

Too scared to feel fear of love’s pain

Inside a solitary shell, bereft…too weak, too lame

An endless bitter cycle will incessantly rain

Until every pleasant loving memory refrains

And my fear of love will leave me never normal, never sane…

Thanks =P xoxoxox

Answer 1

I really like that poem it's really heartfelt and it touched a nerve somewhere in me because I shed a tear something which I haven't done in a while! My poems have often been slammed for being forced to rhyme but yours rhyme and it works really well it totally fits in with the poem and it doesn't sound forced at all.

Answer 2

No one is normal,

No one is same,

I fear love as well,

For it leaves a great pain.

Keep up the writing, it's good stuff!