My first war poem?

Question

Soldier men

Please fall into line

Bow your heads

And feed your time

Exempt from lust

Fear turns rush

Death not ends it

You reach to touch

Walk your way

And feed your smile

Don’t run back

To forgotten miles

Warm your nerves

Drink your rum

Weakness flees

Where courage runs

Blood drunk general

Send me to bed

I lost my funeral

You gained a head.

The message comes across to me OK, how does it read?

Answer 1

Wow very moving, bits don't quite fit but overall really great!

Answer 2

That is awesome

and you said it very well

This poem reminds me of

remembrance day.

My war poem:

In both world wars

men and women

sacrifice their lives

thousands are either killed

or permanently crippled.

The wars would be to get rid of the enemy

to make the country a better place to live.

There is a holiday called Remembrance Day

November 11th

or Memorial Day nearing the end of May

came to be

Answer 3

Hi

That's great, really I like it.