My newest Trigee attempt. What do you think?

Question

I hope the for the time it took, it will mean something to someone

As sunlight dissolves……Across the water

Waves move swiftly……..Upon the shore

Moonbeams dancing……I stand in sadness

in darkened skies……..... Waiting for release

Answer 1

Wow your good at these DL! Keep it up!

Answer 2

Its nice! Really nice! Its very poetic.

I have one note though concerning dancing.It is usually designate movement, ( dynamic )synchronized moves. So, if U selected the dancing to be on the swiftly moving waves, rather than in the darkened skies, that would 'v given a closer to the heart picture.

Answer 3

This is a beautiful Trigee.  Some of the ways I read these lovely words creates even more poetry:  One of the amazing things I like about your Trigee is that your words dance and the ball never ends.

Is in mixing the columns; here is 1234:

Poem One:

As sunlight dissolves……Upon the shore

Moonbeams dancing……Waiting for release

Poem two:

Waves move swiftly……Across the water

in darkened skies…….....I stand in sadness

T.

Answer 4

Are you expecting a Sonic Boom, a Phhtt, or a "When Harry met Sally" sort of release? "I want what SHE's having"

Trigees implode my brain. way too clever.  

Answer 5

Terrible!!!!!  Terribly good!!!!

Answer 6

This is a wonderful Trigee!!!

Good Job

Keep writing

- ♥ Taylor ♥

Answer 7

Another excellent Trigee!   Lots of emotion and visuals in here.

Answer 8

Exceptional.

Answer 9

"Hi!",

This is definitely the best Trigee I have seen.

Lot's of imagery, 1 & 2 are both great with the ultermate 3 EXCELLENT!

Great job, keep them comming.

WELL DONE!

Cheers : )

Answer 10

These Trigee thingies bring out the best in people, and you are no exception....what a lovely lyrical piece, worthy of anyone's anthology.

Do you think TD could bring out a book of Trigee's?

(I wish the younger poets on A!Y would look outside of their small circle to see poetry such as this...I think it would inspire them...with rewarding results)

How about if you repost it - with an enticing question?  Like

Love's Agony - Can you help me?...then grab them,  show them what to do, and post a challenge.  Go on, I dare you.