i am taking an intro. philosophy class, and for my argument paper i chose this topic. in the intro i explained about the atkins diet and then asks the question, is it wrong to eat meat for the sake of losing weight. then i go into detail about farming methods for cows, chickens and pigs. after that i gave arguements both for and against animal rights. then i wrote a paragraph on the soy zone, by barry sears, as an alternative to atkins.
for my conclusion i stated that it is a personal choice how much we want to change our lifestyle for the sake of animal welfare, and that making small changes is a step in the right direction (ie: shop for organic/free range meat, cut down on eating meat). i also said that animal rights can have a snowball effect, one cause leading into the other, and often with no end in sight.
i let a few people read it and they say my conclusion needs to be stronger. how do i make it stronger, and are they right about it being weak?
thanks!
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