My poem, not for the not-so intelligent.?

Question

The style's been done before by a few famous writers, but very few people seem to pick it up. Here's my attempt

LIOR OIL

I’m a cigar trade con. On Golden eve, stuck

O... Dial tone... tile rot!

Cod liver oil prawn I am

Mega Female Illicit Sale Time!!!

Seen keg are vases

Om ... Amen

Ice ... rats – L.A. Cola?!

I yob mopedly;

“Who won’t call an emo?”

“Whose-?” Oh! Spans I demand on women of Lahore

Zero...half....one.

Mow, *Nod* - Named, I snap shoes - oh women!

All act now

Oh Wylde -

Pom boy I, a local, stare – Cinema! ‘Moses’

Average knees emit elastic lie.

Lame f*g.

Emma... In wrap; Lior, evil doctor, elite.

Not laid, ok!

Cuts evened log, No!

No cedar tragic am I.

Answer 1

Keep cool. You might need some other way of expressing your inner poet. I think you could improve it by changing the style or trying a happier subject and you might get a better audience.

Answer 2

Poetry is unique in the way that it doesn't have to fit a certain style...that's why I love it :)

Answer 3

Emo is not music.  But these lyrics stinkin' ROCK!!!  It reminds me of stuff I wrote when I was a teenager.  Have you ever read any of The Dissociatives lyrics?  They're also a jumbled mass of silliness.  Your lines look like you ran actual lyrics through an anagram generator.