My poem .....broken friendship?

Question

i`m only 15 and can`t speak / write english that much. I`m a filipina

broken friendship

How sad it is

to our friendship to end

for all these years

we`ve been best friends.

why do you have to stab me on my back?

when i was faithful to you

why did you do this to me?

I thought our friendship was true!

All these times I didn`t know

how really bad you can be

I finally knew who you really are

a monster that soon everyone will see.

sorry for my bad english I`m not an american and we don`t study nglish here in japan.please help me correct it.

tnx

Answer 1

great. you made me cry, lol. im living that exact situation. okay heres the correct english i believe.....

how sad it is,

(for) our friendship to end

for all these years,

we had been best friends.

why did you have to stab me in the back?

when i was faithful to you

why did you do this to me?

i thought our friendship was true!

all these times i didnt know,

how truly bad you can be.

i finally know who you really are,

a monster that soon everyone will see.

your english was very close. :)

Answer 2

It's really inspiring for someone who does not speak english.

Pretty good- their are some errors but overall good. The fluidity of the poem needs some work but the content is great and the storyline- awesome.

I'll correct the major some errors for you.

How sad it is

for our friendship to end

for all these years

we were best friends

why do you have to stab me in the back?

when I was faithful to you

why did you do this to me

I thought our friendship was true

all these times I didn't know

how really bad you can be{try to re-write this, it doesn't flow}

I finally know who your really are

a monster, that soon everyone will see

Answer 3

wow, that was touching

remindss me of my ex-best friend

anywayyy I agree 100% with Run Wild

he/she's got everything down :D

Answer 4

heck you write peotry better than a large part ofamericans it very good. i think its great but change for to after

Answer 5

i like it the way it is