Question:

My poem?~comment please?=]?

by  |  earlier

0 LIKES UnLike

Her voice,

once soft like summer rain,

now fell upon his ears,

like thunderstorms.

Her eyes,

once full of everything life gave,

were now bland.

empty.

Her soul,

once free,

Filled to the brim with colour, scent and sound...

now void.

What is it that you did to her?

To break such life,

to shatter such lust,

to hurt such love.

Now you must wonder,

whats behind,

her perfect eyes.

Thats lost their perfect shine.

 Tags:

   Report

9 ANSWERS


  1. that's hecka good!!!


  2. I love ittt. I loved how you put it all together. The whole setup is awsomeee. Also it has such emotion behind it. I love it. Please keep writing.  

    Could you comment on my poem:

    http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

  3. It's cool

  4. That is bloody brilliant. I love it. You really have a rare talent, wow!

  5. It's really good....

  6. Poetry should be written in the third person ie

    "What was done to her, to break such life"

    "Now it must be wondered what's behind"

  7. i like it

  8. That's nice work!

  9. Its good, I'm gonna steal it and pass it off as my own.

Question Stats

Latest activity: earlier.
This question has 9 answers.

BECOME A GUIDE

Share your knowledge and help people by answering questions.