My poem i scribbled last night comments would be great?

Question

Do you like my new poem?

Time stands still

Devilishly deep eyes time stands still,

For no fool cannot find the will,

Stagger an eye for you the path he tread,

Left lingers the words you had said,

They look beyond the eyes you lure,

To fall and dive devilishly more,

There paused in time as both eyes lock,

As if her eyes could stop the clock.

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TY

Answer 1

Very good!!!

Answer 2

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I love your poems! Some of them are so seductive! (Like the kiss one) You are such a good writer. Really gifted. Honestly the best I've seen today on Yahoo Answers.

Thank you. I enjoyed that. :)