My poem...?

Question

With distracted glances

An absent sigh

He shifts me aside

And bids me goodbye

An uneasy churning

Twists in my gut

he promised that

he loved me but....

he swore there was no possibility

that there was something wrong with me

but through the mist i began to see

he was no longer in love with me

i told myself it wasnt true

that he still felt

the way i do

but that nagging doubt

said something too

he swore that he would never leave

that no truer love

could i achieve

but his distracted tone led me

to disbelieve

then that dark day

my doubt was confirmed

i desperately prayed

it wasnt so

but in his cold eyes

the truth was conveyed

what used to be fun

brought only pain

my stars blinked out

left fog and rain

joy unreachable

smiling a strain

painful memories everywhere

not support nor comfort

could mend this tear

my love ripped away

left me raw and bare

he said he was sorry

that he'd broken my heart

but he saw it as better

if we were apart

Answer 1

beautiful word choice, great rhymes, rhyme scheme, and topic. i loved it.  you are my favorite poet.

Answer 2

Ok so i read two stanzas i bet you i can predict the rest of the poem. So after the two you swear he still loves you, but then sometime you realize the truth that yea he doesn't like you and then the poem goes to "oh i'm heartbroken."

Either i'm good at predicting, or you're cliche. I'm thinking the later.. no i don't think your poem is good.

Answer 3

I'm sorry... what is the question in this?

If it's "Is my poem good?" then no it isn't, sorry...