My poem "Bitten", is it any good?

Question

The air grew thin the black night grew darker

A cool breath consumed my flesh

A desire came over me like none I've even known

I felt a presence behind me

His teeth sunk into my flesh with desirable pain

I didn't cry out nor did I refuse him

I gave into his need

For the warmth that ran inside of my veins

I felt drained with passion and desire

Weakness pulled me to my knees

He gazed at me with his deep darkened eyes

Paralyzing my soul with his passion

I could feel him growing inside of me

Claiming me for his own

My body yearns for his touch

I craved his blood stained lips

Rising to my feet as he slips into the darkness

Leaving behind a message transparent in my mind

A promise of a soon return

To satisfy my desires

Answer 1

O.M.G!!!  these is really deep. You can keep reading it again ans again. Also write poems but for sure not as good as yours!!

                     Congratulations, it left me speechless.

Answer 2

Dude there is no way to explain what I just read...

That poem was striking!

It left me speechless :]

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Answer 3

Ooh, I like it! Vampires are something i can relate to...

no comment.

but I really like it. I'd give it a 4/5 stars.  It puts a good image in my mind.

Answer 4

Oh my gosh thats amazing!!! You sure have a lot of talent!

Keep rockin it

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