My poetry, What do you think?

Question

I want to touch your skin just once

Your scent I want to dance into it

I close my eyes

Fate you say

I close my eyes

I dance on nimble feet

My head to one side, I glance at you

Fate turned around

A joke

Fate you say

I close my eyes

I dream of you too often

I want to touch your skin

(c) 2008

Answer 1

i like it, as far as i know its unique.  it's very intriguing and makes me interpret it in a lot of different ways, deep.  very well done!

Answer 2

What it means to me is not what it was meant to be by you.

When I read this poem I think about a young girl dreaming about her prince or boy she may like

She wants to reach out and touch

it seems his scent draws her into a dance which cause her feet  to become nimlbe.

And as she turns her head to look into his eyes.

Fate cuts in and puts her into another dream which happens to be the same dream over and over again

Sorry that's how I see it. I give you and A for effort and a B for the poem.

Keep writing.

Answer 3

wow..

kinda intense

Answer 4

Really deep, makes the reader think and try to figure out what it means for himself, not personal, really expansive it's a really good one. Why didn't I think of that? rate mine.

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Answer 5

Wow that sounds wonderfuly close to being very creepy.  Are you a stalker.  Oh and I would take offense to someone not wanting to touch me more than once.