My revision-Ever feel like you one step from being replaced?

Question

Understudy

This is nothing new;

Been here times before-

Mouths move to speak

to material familiar.

Breath into lines

A dramatic pause; an interjection

The applause light searing,

rallying in motivation.

The understudy takes the stage-

Awkward in motions

The cast throws encouragement

With scripted emotion

A smile and a wink

With the usual zeal

Everyone loves a loser

Its part of the appeal

Firmly against the grain

still playing the part

Lacking in composure

yet so full of heart

Just for the moment,

You’ll share in the production.

Until the real actors,

are quickly inducted

So reserve all the pep.

This is all just pretend.

Here from the beginning-

fully know how it ends.

Answer 1

That was a sad poem; the subject experienced being unappreciated. You put lots of feelings into it. You write with pain. I thought it was good.

Answer 2

"Hi!",

I just went to compare it with your original one. But can't seem to find it. But I do remember reading it.

I think it all flows great.

Just a suggestion for L22 (You’ll share in the production.) maybe take the (in) out. Than it will all flow perfectly.

Written well, we all at some point can sympathize with you.

Answer 3

i think you should listen to this song.. i like it by the way.  really good and stuff.  yah...

Answer 4

Ain't that the truth.  Good.