My short story?

Question

I tried writing some stories before too, but they were all in a notebook I lost a while ago.

This one is written for a literature lesson and a project. We were all writing short stories based on one of the 2 poems by Nazım Hikmet Ran, one of my favorite poets, so I wrote this, it wasn't over at school but I finished it. My teacher said she would put this one for the project -it's not a small one- and we'll send it to a magazine in the following days. It was inspired by the poem and the poem itself is suitable to my overall personality and writing style. But the actual story is in Turkish so there are some changes in this version. There are some little annoying word repeatings because of it.

By the way, I'm a 14 year old girl, have been reading properly since I were 3. Reading and writing is a passion for me and I want to keep on. So, could you give me advice and suggestions and tell me what you think?

http://falathiel.deviantart.com/art/Amid-The-Beeches-79364108

Answer 1

well i am not the type of reading girl but i thought it was really good!

Answer 2

It looks really good. Very well written and well thought out. Great job!

And by the way, thanks for commenting on my poem I wrote the other day: http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

Answer 3

I love the descriptions...They are really nice...and I cant tell u whether it's good enough for your assignment or not but it's good enough for me to read....I like it.

Answer 4

If you story was in a bookstore i will buy it! ^^