NEW POEM! Please read and tell me what you think! Won't you?

Question

Move into the light

Walk along the high beam,

perhaps if you focus,

you will reach the moon.

Dance, dance along its surface,

crawl into the craters,

speak into the sky.

Feel the weightlessness

take you over,

float,

feel happier than you

ever have.

Swim through the air,

Leave your mark forever,

for once be apart of something.

All you have to do is move into the light.

Answer 1

I guess you should lay off the mushrooms

Answer 2

Dude I luv it!

Keep writing ♥

Answer 3

That is a beautiful poem you have major talent.

Answer 4

it's really good! but, in the 5th line i would say add another "dance" or take one away, because it kind of sounds awkward to me

Answer 5

Its good. You should check out allpoetry.com you can post your poems to be read and enter them in contest.While reading other peoples poetry.

Answer 6

Good!

Answer 7

I feel like I've taken to the Celestial Olympics... where medals are from the rocks of Jupiter. I enjoyed reading.

Answer 8

*sniffles*

YOU'RE AWESOME!!!!