Naughty kitty?

Question

Grace's Revenge

By Cynthia S.

I banished them from my room

for reasons entirely clear

they bite my toes, hide my watch

to drive me nuts, I fear.

Alarm clock rings, I’m up,

brew Kona for a treat,

open my door, cats lying there

glaring at my feet.

Out in the kitchen, cooking,

I'm planning out my day;

George wanders by, rubs my legs

Grace goes off to play.

Coffee in hand, I go

perusing morning's inbox,

four pound demon leaps to my head

giving me clawful shocks.

From head to desk she climbs

pretending she's unseen,

drops her paw into my cup,

"Gracie, you don’t need caffeine!”

Answer 1

I believe Gracie has you trained!  No more coffee for her.

Answer 2

well bathe your cat and then he won't be naughty

Answer 3

Nice poem about your two cats,George and Gracie. But

Elaine Is right.  Cats shouldn`t have caffine. It`s toxic like

chocolate. I had to hide everything from my animals. Even plants.

Answer 4

this is goood.

its kinda confusin.

idk!

but very goood job.

;]]

Answer 5

No wonder she's so hyper.  Use a traveling cup for your coffee from now on.  Cute poem, laughed a lot on reading it. Reminds me of Whoopee's kitten days.

Answer 6

Cute picture!  I like this piece.  From a strictly critique point of view. Your consistancy in the meter really helps this poem work.  Also, the consistant rhyme works in a poem like this much better than in more serious pieces. (Although a cat scratching your head could be pretty serious, I guess. :-) )  I have to say I don't like "clawful shocks" which seems made up just to fit the meter and rhyme.  I don't have a suggestion for that but I think it's something you might want to look at.   The last stanza is great especially the way you broke the meter in the last line which, I think, increases the impact.

Oh, and by the way, I'm old enough to appreciate a pair of kittys named for George Burns and Gracie.Allen.  (unless it was a coincidence?)

Remember, critique is opinion.  This is mine.  You may use it, lose it, or give it to Goodwill.

Answer 7

That is a naughty kitty

she gets her paw in your coffee

She doesn't need caffeine

she can have her cat nip

Perhaps make her area of the house

just hers her own bed,

Keep her away from your coffee

You had good reason to banish the kitties

from your room

I would not appreciate my watch being hidden either

On the other hand they are kitties and they have more energy

than a cat if it is 12 years old

kitties are playful.

get into all kind of trouble