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Question

ok i am writing a poem and i need 4 more lines

also the 2nd and 4th line has to rhyme and i need a title

ocean tides

coming and going

feeling the pain

while its growing

the ocean changes so do i

living and breathing

then it'll die

the ocean lives

and it dies

it feels everything

it even sighs

not getting any younger

so much to hold on to

the tides are coming in closer

i think i know what your going through

any ideas for the next for lines

and a title

Answer 1

When I hear a lie

I feel pain

When the ocean dies

I start to cry.....as if someone died

Answer 2

the tides are low

the tides are high

birds sitting there

as the ocean tides die

Sorry if you dont like that one, here how about this:

the ocean changes

and so do i

bigger and stronger

and then it dies

Answer 3

the foam breaks the shore

you frown at it's imminent caress

becoming lost in  emotion

all the while, feeling stress

and for a title hmmm...maybe Water-logged Melancholia

Answer 4

ocean tides

ebbing and flowing

feeling the pain

while its growing

the ocean changes so do i

living and breathing

then it will  die

flotsam and jetsam

on it's breast

swelling with turmoil

we never rest

not getting any younger

so much to hold on to

the tides are coming in closer

i think i know what your going through

Crushed in the wake

of a pulsing sea

I'll drown in this graveyard

and finally be free.

I changed line two for giggles and I think that in stanza 2 it is an absolute repeat of stanza ones last lines. Just a consideration.

Answer 5

ocean is full of water and with fish &animal

We are all in the earth  mamal

ocean is vast  ,no pollution and clean

we are all polluted and mean

Answer 6

i think its really good, but it could use something in it.

'every cloud has a silver lining,

passing through dim light,

darkness slowly declining,

now its moving out of sight.

its shadow upon the rain,

hails more and more,

waves now going insane,

wishing to close the door.

no more sunshine upon sea,

and a redish light dawns,

the pale night sets you free.'

you can use this if you like, i think ur an aspiring writer.

keep up the great work.

xox

Answer 7

this is a hard one... C'MON the last lines are always the crucial ones, so if u wanna call urself a poet, u should be helping ppl finishing off their poems instead of asking for help!!

having said that, the 'suck my d1ck and l**k my azz' end line always amuses!

hope that helped :)

Answer 8

change dies to strives

as water collieds with rock

my mind collieds in thought

my head with the sand

and hand in hand