New born...poem...critque pleasE!!?

Question

My brothers having a baby in a couple of months,

So I'll like to make some changes to myself.

I wanna sit with him for a couple of hours,

And say I'm sorry, sorry for not being there.

You see I had any brother he was 20,

He was my best friend so we played in the street,

And this drunken driver in a silver car,

Took away his life as he died in my arms.

So I shoved my family away and never spoke to them,

I assumed it was God's fault and I hate him so.

You see my brother tried calling almost every day,

But to pick up the phone, I needed something to say.

My heart is still now bleeding, but new life is happening,

So I want to make some change so the baby can love me,

I want it to look into my eyes and see what life can be,

I've made my mistakes but I'm beginning to see.

It's not the drugs, or the alcohol, which makes me live,

It's the love of women and my friends and family.

So I'll call them this thanks giving and ask for their forgiveness.

I couldn't think of a better day to do this

Answer 1

umm r u emo

otherwise u need to um be happier yea *smile* :o)

Answer 2

I'm very sorry for your loss...because of the emotional depth, I will refrain from changing anything.

I hope you succeed in finding happier days. <3

Answer 3

It's quite good.

"I had any brother" ??? is that a typo?

Fourth stanza is the best.

Answer 4

Very sorry for your loss, when you feel up to it, read your poem, there are some word errors , that are misleading.