New poem!What do YOU think? =)?

Question

I know my problem, its plain to me.

I know my problem, its there for me to see.

Its so vivid and bright,

like an unwanted light.

I see him there walking,

he looks my way but I do my best to hide my face.

He walks closer my way,

my panic I can feel spread.

He passes by slowly,

looking like hes looking for my face,

but I still hide in my pathetic place.

I watch him go and silently whisper my secret words,

“I love you” I mouth as he turns the corner,

“forever” silently I breathe.

For that split second I did catch his eye and my heart

nearly stopped.

For that one second I felt full of courage,

but when I turned away to hide my face

it was lost,

replaced with fear it was.

I know my problem, its plain to me.

I know my problem, its there for me to see.

Yes I know my problem,

I've fallen in love with my best friend. . .

Not true but I thought it was a good poem, what do you think of my new "work"?

P.S. Good late morning every one!!=)

Answer 1

i can relate to this poem soooooo much! its really good too.

Answer 2

Dear God, its so girly!

I felt like I was standing in a girl's mind. AHhhh....

(Rubs hands through hair)

Give a warning next time, will you. I think I'm going to vomit.

(Pulls out hair.)