Nice fighting story how do you like it?

Question

Fist of Fury

Chapter 1: Fight for Destiny

Once upon a time there was a dark fighter who was a champion of fighting and so amazing that he was kicked out of the Dream Coliseum for killing the other men.

Then, a young boy named Hazel went to school. Hazel was an amazing boy.

He usually gets in a fight with the boys at school.

Hazel was a handsome young man. He was 9 years old he had aqua blue eyes and brown hair.

He soon got kicked out of school for getting in to many fights.

Soon afterwards he decided to join The Dream Coliseum.

“He’s too young!” shouted the counselor of The Dream Coliseum.

“But… but….. Conner I’m great at fighting!”

Conner was the counselor of The Dream Coliseum.

He had a white beard and brown eyes and he had white hair.

Conner was 57 years old when he started to fight.

Now 20 years later, he became the counselor of The Dream Coliseum.

“If you can prove to me in a fight with another boy your age, I’ll let you in.”

“Fine! I accept to fight”

“Ok then

Answer 1

If you wrote it for fun, it is ok.  If you wrote it for a class assignment, it needs a LOT of work.

Answer 2

I think it is good.