Not exactly a poem, but what do you think?

Question

I'm standing

in the pouring rain

Till I'm soaked

Through my body

and into my soul

Where the pain starts

So I can wash it away

If you have to run

Can I come too?

But if you need to be alone

I'll wait for you

It's what I said

And it's what I meant

Did you hear?

Cause you never came back

And I'm still standing here

I'm standing

in the pouring rain

Till I'm soaked

Through my body

and into my soul

Where the pain starts

So I can wash it away

Every drop is like a tear

Spilling from my dry heart

But the pain still sears

So still I'll wait here

Answer 1

it's sounds like a poem to me but it's only a poem if the author wants it 2 b. i think it's beautiful! you should get it published.. it's so very sad but so very beautiful, i love the body and soul bit... oh i just love it all!

Answer 2

It's hard to get.

I dont really like it.

sorry.

i just thought that if you were like writing it for something for school that you would want an honest opinion.

So yehh

Answer 3

Standing in the pouring rain

You feel the coldest pain

As the skies dream of the sun

You wait for what soul may come

Sharing tears with the blackest skies

You want the world to hear your cries

Somebody will hear your thunder

You tell yourself it's not over

The rain fixes the earth and fills holes with water

But it also drowns the souls that suffer

You're willing to wait for an eternity

Knowing it will only end with a tragedy

A person has come to give you cover

And begins to tell you that it's all over

There's a comfort in your mind

As leave your dark world behind

The stings of pain leave your body

As you go back into the bright reality

You wake from this dream

As you feel the water stream

The pain still lingers there

It's something you choose to bear

This feeling is meant to be shared

For those who aren't so scared

Within this pain so intense  

Resides a happiness so dense

But only what two hearts can bring

An infinite beauty, it will spring

Standing in the pouring rain

You feel the coldest pain

As the skies dream of the sun

You wait for that soul come

Answer 4

its nice. i like the emotion put in it.

its awesome to relate to.

simple yet,

sophisticated,

your talented,

keep writing!

Answer 5

Its cool.  To be honest, a little too sophisticated for my taste, but that's because I'm the kind of person who finds the whole "man who was eating his shoe" poem classic literature.  Your's is still cool though.  Its poetic and stuff.

Your thoughts on mine...http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

Answer 6

I like it. =)

Answer 7

I like it, but it makes me somewhat sad!

Answer 8

It does sound a lot like a poem, but of course it only is if the author wants it to be =]

I really like the idea, seems to be well thought up (or maybe just a good idea that popped into your head once)

The only tiny thing I'd give advice over is the EXACT repetition of the first verse as the second to the last verse.

Being as it's a relatively medium sized poem (or whatever)... You should try for a little more variations.