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Question

here is a poem i wrote yesterday. Tell me what you think.

Knocking on your window,

begging you to let me in.

Ignoring me you walk out,

with her on yor arm

Making me feel,

Worthless,

Hopeless,

Sick.

Don't sweet talk me,

It's to late you kiled my love for you with that girl

Making a fool of yourself,

you keep mesing with my head

You speak, Words,

the worthless, meaningless letters,

that I'm uncapable of understanding.

I can see your lips,

trying to form apologies

Tell me how you feel,

Leading me on is unfair

Disabling me with every lie,

I may never walk again.

Answer 1

on a tech level i feel you may want to use the spell check.

on a personal level you made me hurt for you,and a poem should make the reader feel the writer so well done

Answer 2

I liked it very much.

I thought it was a little unclear, but I thought you described pain well...if that makes any sense.

I give it a 7 out of 10 and think that the only way it could improve is if you stated it a little more clearly.

Good job! K

Answer 3

Wow .  Im speachless.

(Vote me as best answer)

Answer 4

No, it's ok I guess. I give it a 5.1

Answer 5

The grammar is way off in many parts and you have a lot of run on sentences. I can offer advice piece by piece

Knocking on your window,

I begged to be let in

Instead you walked out-ignoring me

with her on your arm

It mades me feel,

Worthless-Hopeless

Sick-You broke me

and it isn't fair

Don't bother with sweet talk

Your straying killed our love

You are nothing but a fool

Yet you still haunt my mind

You speak words-I cannot understand

Worthless, meaningless letters

Your lips are moving

trying to form apologies

How do you really feel?,

Please don't lead me on

You disable me with every lie,

Leaving me crippled

THIS IS JUST MY OPINION--JUST GIVING YOU IDEAS