OK So I have a new Horror coming out soon and here is the plot tell me what u think.?

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I will add more detail later and so please don't say u should add this and that. Last but not least this is copyright so it would be plagiarizing to steal the idea and publish it just so u know.

The story is about a girl that is born in Manhattan and another born in Berlin. They were both were born at the same exact time and have no relation what so ever. As the two girls begin maturing they can hear each others thoughts. When one gets hurt the other feels as much pain. When the German girl gets took from her home one night the other girl senses it and must save her from the blood thirsty cannibal.

Another thing the book is will be called (Thoughts of Blood)

Answer 1

Sounds like something i'd watch...it is a movie right?

Answer 2

Okay, i'm totally going to by that book when it comes out. Sounds really good!

Answer 3

Hi. The first thing that you should consider, is who is your target audience. If you are after a less sophisticated audience, then a typical blood-fest will do. However, if you are after a higher level of meaning, you may want to make sure that all of your main characters are well-developed, especially your blood-thirsty cannibal.

Some questions you could tackle in your story are:

A) What is the story behind the antagonist (the cannibal)?

B) Has the cannibal always been that way (in-bred), or did it become one after a tragic accident that mad it lose its mind?

C) Why did the cannibal happen to target the German girl, when it could have attacked anyone? Was it somehow attracted to the psychic connection that existed (unknowingly)  between the 2 girls?

Another thought:

I think that one of the best things about a good story is a good plot twist. For your situation, perhaps you could throw something in like the cannibal is somehow a blood-relative of one of the girls.

I hope that I have provided some constructive feedback.

Answer 4

Sounds really good... I'll probably buy it if i can find it. =]

Answer 5

Wow that's refreshing newly Good!!!

Bravo Bravo Bravo...

U may even want to add... that both sharing the same thoughts commit murder at The Same Time but in Different Country.... It was ongoing for a while until the Police of the respective country found out the similarities during one Police International Seminar in Singapore..

sounds Cool ?

Answer 6

wow sounds cool!