OK a poem about eyes, i call it "Blue bliss" comments are great?

Question

A girl in my new college form has these amazing blue eyes :) arrh so i wrote this for the eyes...do you like it?

Crafty eyes by now persist

streams on the river of blue bliss,

caught me again i wish longer

of that bejeweled wonder,

and when they met at glance

was his eyes to her trance,

just a glimpse, a second still

look up into her eyes i will.

Answer 1

Aww that's so sweet and beautiful! If you show it to her she will love you for that. I wish some boy would write that about me ='(. lol. Beautiful