Observe my rap lyrics! What do you think?

Question

I walk to the last room, in the hall, the bathroom,

got a spasm in my stomache, I want it to pass soon,

opening the door, holding more than my butt can leak,

I'm stuck and weak, I sit down I might just bust the seat,

my inside, (yeah) is turning and tossing,

I'm burning from exhaustion, as I sit squirming with caution,

first a, plip and a ploop, my butts getting too loose,

I'm sick as I choose, to ****, I need a different exuse,

so I open a mag, and I can't focus I'm mad,

so I'm closing the mag, not hoping this drags,

but it does, the smells invading my nostrils,

making me bobble, I hate it, I wobble,

to get all of the waste out, I let out a great "ouch",

my face pout, as I wish I didn't get take out,

now it's settling, I get the tissue to wipe,

issues of life down the toilet, was a critical fight,

Answer 1

GREAT AND THAT COSTS 10 POINTS

Answer 2

I think it has a good sync towards it. Very good and has a good beat.

Answer 3

LOL@YOU!!

That's different! Made my day.

Awesome man.

a 10 for Creativity

Answer 4

Hahaha that was very good! :P

Answer 5

this is great you use Multi syllable rhyme you had a very creative topic you stuck to your topic till the end ... but it ddidn't have any puch line but had some wordplay .. so ill  give it a 9/10

Answer 6

That was some funny sh*t.

Answer 7

Boo!!!!

Answer 8

hahaha funny s***, nice job...

Answer 9

Oh man.  It is a great rap or poem.  Either you are lyrically skilled or just poetic when it comes to the bathroom.  But overall it's a really good poem.

Answer 10

lol.That S h i t was wack as f*****k but funny.