Oh god, oh god, I tried a trigee. Do you like lemon pie?

Question

To quote dearest Grannyjill, ignore my question, and answer the d**n poem.

Tampered with Evidence - (sorrowful Terran attempt at trigee)

Withering flowers.............in the wind

speak a message............voices echo,

rising above belief............evading mortality.

Night still falls.................but not forever.

Answer 1

I like poems that are more inspirational. This one reminds me of sadness, suicide.

Answer 2

I think your trigee works really well, any way I read it. To me, it is not sad at all. As long as voices echo... And "evading mortality" sounds like an inner signature!

And, if you really want to know, yes, I like lemon pie, but without meringue.  

Answer 3

Yes, all things come to an end.  The curse of a trigee which you have evaded is when the two are combined and flow becomes halting.  Very well done.

Answer 4

Yes, I like it, much.

Answer 5

I have trouble with trigees, but they are so elegant when done, you can't write just one!   Make that Key lime pie for me, please!

Answer 6

lets see...pie, or trigaree..

http://www.omgwhatever.com/farmer/pieman...

Answer 7

Hahaha! You all crack me up!  (I don't care for lemon pie!)

I think you did it fabulously!!

I need to move on to something else. I think I'm addicted to trigees!

Answer 8

Yes, I like...both the poem and lemon pie...but...lemon pie and withering flowers.  Oh, well.  As for me trying (sounds entirely too much like math, so I'll maybe pass) a trigee...it's debatable.  (Swatting the damned eraser. ) Let's see if we have to put a cap on Trigree...'pears he likes that. Sheesh. He says 'trigger' for the trigee.

I need two aspirin. Am putting my paper cover back up over the right side of the screen.

And, it 'taint sorrowful!  So there!

Answer 9

This is quite beautiful, you did a wonderful job here with your poetry!  My favorite is the left side, and oh how I love it , just so beautiful!

Withering flowers.............

speak a message............ ,

rising above belief............

Night still falls.................

There is just something about that left side that appeals so much to me!  Not that the right side isn't good because it is!  It is just that left side is so beautiful, it reminds me of Haiku, and how I love that kind of writing!

I also have one myself in the working, I am hoping mine is as good as the one you have done, this is not easy, and you have done it well!!

Cheers!!!-----More   More   More

PS Yes I love lemon pie with or without the meringue!

Answer 10

I love it; excellent, I would have assumed you were used to wrting trigee`s.

I never had lemon pie. sorry to lovers of lemon pie, but the sound of lemon in pie grosses me out.

Answer 11

This is a wonderful Trigee.  Of all the poetic forms, I find this one most difficult. I believe yours has many levels of meaning. I especially like "voices echo," an expression which adds sound to the poem(s).