Ok new poem tell me what you think

Question

A broken heart torn in two pieces

one piece for you the other for me

now grab both pieces and i'll grab the needle and thread

and we'll sew it back together again

grab it tight and don't let go if you do they will fall apart once more

don't worry just pick it up

dust it off give it a kiss to soothe the pain

there! see all better

now where off once more grab it tight and don't let

go, oh no! you dropped it once more, my dear

that is it! twice is to much

you've torn it again

No! leave it there now

pass it back to me

enough is enough twice was to many for me

I'll sew it myself and mend the wounds

go no please go for

i can not beer to see you anymore

if i do my heart feels sore

a reminder of the damage you've done

i have sewed it back up

in time it will heal but the scar will remain

twice was to many for this heart of mine

ok hope you like it :)

Answer 1

me not like kissing weird heart meal. but story good. me think you try more pomes.  

Answer 2

it's alright.