Okay. Heres another poem from a rank amateur. Do you like it?

Question

Heart Transplant Donor

By Warren Domke

I’m donating my heart to you,

But I don’t think you’re sick.

It’ll serve you well; like it did for me

When I could make it tick.

It’s kind of bloody, needs a little ice.

But hook it up and it’ll work real nice.

What about me?

Oh, I don’t know.

I guess Doctor Jarvik

Will help me go with the flow.

Why?

You’ve already stolen it from me

It’s mine no more.

I don’t need CPR

Just leave me down her on the floor.

Sigh!!

(I'll admit it's a bit silly, but I wanted to keep it light hearted--oh dear, there's that word again.)

Answer 1

Tricky and silly, is needed at times. Enjoyed the silly.

I think you lost an e on the floor.

Answer 2

It's very funny in a bittersweet kind of way. I have heard of loving somebody to death, but this is the extreme.  I did enjoy this fanciful, and slightly bloody, love poem. Not amateurish at all, just a bit of fun about something quite serious.  Sometimes if we don't laugh, we cry.  Thank you.

Answer 3

I don't think it's rank at all--and neither are you!  A light-hearted (pun intended?) love poem.

Answer 4

Well - if you are willing to give of yourself for love - you should pick something you have two of - like kidneys or lungs. Poem could be something like - "I can't take a breath without you" or ....no - I do not know any kidney humor right now. Or maybe "My life felt dirty without you - this will help clean it up" ? ♥

Answer 5

Well, whatyaknow, a poem that actually makes sense and is easy to read and interpret in good old fashioned english language.  It has humor and pathos, sadness, a broken heart and a twist to it, who could want for more.  I love it!

Answer 6

yeah i like it

Answer 7

lol... so much for sensitive