Old Poem from when I obeyed the poetic rules. You like?

Question

SONNET (Miltonic)

How brief we are upon this earthly scene.

And too little a time do we all get

To savour and explore our talents. Yet

Still some manage to illustrate their dreams

With sun-dappled rays and silvered moon-beams.

A faithful life painter has one regret,

(True to his canvas and bound by its net)

Some cannot see.

................................ Blinkered in the extreme,

They rarely can view with unfettered eyes

The world painted in clear colours and shades,

Imperfect and flawed, yet each day renewed.

Not for them the wonderment of surprise

The waiting, breath-held, to watch the parades.

Alas, they won’t see the world bright bedewed.

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Milton's sonnets were Italian based but he would put a break in the eighth line, with the latter part belonging with the ninth line. Rhyme scheme 1,2,2,1,1, 2,2, - 1,3,4,5, 3,4,5

10 syllable lines.

Answer 1

"Hello...Is this Grandma Milton's Fresh Marinara? I would like to order a case."

Answer 2

Ah, "Paradise Lost"...(snapping back to the present...)

Well done.

Answer 3

Yes, you do rules well.  The content and structure are engaging and easy to read.  It has a singsong quality to it and I very much enjoy your use of vocabulary.  Lovely words like blinkered, unfettered and bedewed that I rarely have an opportunity to use.

My problem with following the rules is that I now find it difficult to break them.  It's a good thing I love structured poetry so much.  :)

Keep up the great work, Jill

Answer 4

Talented, Talented, Talented.Enjoyed beyond words.I have so much to learn from you.

Answer 5

Well, Maam, I only have this to say of that:

I think you did bettern ole Miltie.

Answer 6

In your case, obedience is GOOOOD!  I need to learn how to be disobedient too.

Answer 7

If I thought I could aspire to write something as exquisite as this I would never break a rule again!  I hope your legs are getting better.

Answer 8

BTW, are we dancing a waltz or a two step.  Wait...that's rhyme patterns!  lol  This read well.  You do like challenges, don't you.  P.S. anymore "whooppe" poems up your sleeve?

Answer 9

this is a complicated pattern to me.

i give you 20 stars out of 10!

and your artistry is done so all should see it.

nice granny!