One more, and then I gotta go. Any good?

Question

Night time embrace

Embrace me...........Strong arms

Dark night...............Candle light

Visions entice.........Passion awakes

Starlit skies............Fireworks

Smiling moons........Float on clouds

Fireflies..................Kiss good night

Night time love........Eternal bliss

Answer 1

It looks perfect (or should I say they look perfect) - you've found another genre in which to excel.... (I love the starlit skies/fireflies rhyme)

Answer 2

Reenie, It's great!  Embrace me, strong arms...I shall swoon!

And I have to wait three more weeks!

Answer 3

Well, I really like the emotions that are evoked from the words, because they bring such great visualization. The only thing you should consider is the many periods, as they make the poem look sloppy. Maybe even put words, for example:

"Embrace me, with strong arms

Dark night, through the candle light

Visions entice as passion awakes

Starlit skies caused by fireworks

Smiling moons float on clouds

Fireflies kiss goodnight

Night time love brings eternal bliss... "

I really love the words, so KEEP WRITING!

Hope I could be of help.

Answer 4

it's the best girl.......see ya later :o)

Answer 5

It is wonderful short and straight to the point. You got skills girl. Good job. The words make you feel passion and some confidence in oneself. To go beyond what life can offer.

Answer 6

Beautiful, thanks for sharing.

Answer 7

"Hi!",

you did a wonderful job on these. I didn't know you could do 7 lines. I thought they had to be 4 or two joined together too make 8. I'll have too ask TD since he made them. I'm all confussed now.

either way seems all good too me.

WELL DONE!

Cheers : )

Answer 8

wow! it's really good!

Answer 9

EXCELLENT !!

Answer 10

Ur avatar is unique & catching, and this poem is DOING rather than saying..How did U arrange it ? strong arms, candle light, passion, fireworks, floating on clouds.. and then, there must be a good night kiss ..For me the right column is enough, and should end w/ and be as eternal bliss.

U earned a star, but U gotta tell me what Ur avatar says.

Answer 11

It is a visionary delight, Since I only wrote one and only discovered what they were when I did write one I am limited in my ability to give a professional opinion... "but this ole Gawga Country boy liked it."

Answer 12

romantic passion and a night of natures wonder, what more could one want! Kudos!

Answer 13

This one is smoking!!!!!!!!!    Hot, on all three counts!  My compliments.