One more before the sack is hit......care to comment?

Question

This one is serious. There are a few lonely bodies out there in YAland for whom waking up to each day in a new life is a challenge. This one is for you.

Thanks to Elaine's casual words inspiring the first line and Neoman for getting me in the mellow mood.

New day, new way

by Jellz Fisher 080718

Seeing the dawn in a new light

Forgetting the

darkness of last night.

Feeling the sun warm the still air.

Recalling the time

you were still there.

Seeing myself in a new way.

Just as my eyes

greet the new day.

Telling myself I can make it.

Convincing my heart

life won’t break it.

Grabbing the chance to be free.

Re-learning how to be......just me.

G'dnight all....zzzzzzzz

Answer 1

Pleasent dreams, It is now 7: 00 a.m. 7/18 usa.

Jellz, This poem is a treasure! Last line is what I said to myself, upon death of my husband. I mail two certain poems

to new widows. Your poem would cover them with comfort,

as well various other losses. Just perfect! Hope you don't mind if I pass it on some time, with your name of course.

Thank you for a heart felt read!

Answer 2

Woah, this is h**l good.

Keep writing

<3

Answer 3

It's got a catchy rythym, not too hokey, and fun to read.  Good work.

Answer 4

This is wonderful! Worthy of taping to the bathroom mirror for inspiration each day!

Sweet dreams.....

Answer 5

good effort

Answer 6

Very nice...great content and use of rhyme thoughtfully rendered.  I especially like the last two lines and the message it sends.   It is important to learn to be yourself and like who you are.  Well done

Answer 7

Perfection!!!

Answer 8

Drawn to the dawn

beginnings

horizons

possibilities

Cut down on your snoring though,  we can hear it in the states!

Answer 9

whenever i face a new day

i wonder what things will come in to  play

sometimes its good

and sometimes its bad

but the moments i have

ill make the best that i can

because though we have all heard it before

life is too short

for us to ignore

so lift yourself up and smile at  the sun

because , before you know it

another day is done.

Hope you like tha too.........just thought of that now.

Answer 10

This is an excellent poem, both in form and content. Poets take inspiration from each other and then soar off to create their own works of art. Goodnight to you, there at the end of the Earth. May you dream of soaring through space.

Answer 11

I loved it especially the lines: Convincing my heart

life won’t break it.

the poem by michaella is also very beautiful..............loved 'em both

Answer 12

Good night, sweet Princess!

your serious work still brings smiles

over all the miles that "separate

only our bodies"  

But our selves are always together.

Sleep well!

Answer 13

I love your serious side just as much as your playful side. There are some really beautiful lines in this..."Telling myself I can make it./Convincing my heart/life won’t break it." I love that line.