Opinion on my writing?

Question

Please check it out. It's about dissociation. Please tell me what you think, I'm hoping to publish this someday. Thanks!

http://blog.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=blog.view&friendID=15330146&blogID=220719913&Mytoken=58845701-55E4-46E2-864C5CACF5B8E7C73695213

Answer 1

when you follow your link, your myspace page is private. Way to go There!!!!!!

Answer 2

Your site hurts the eyes. If you get serious about writing, give your readers a comfortable experience with a white background, or better yet a black background with a contrasting font.

This will alow a reader to connect with your story and ride it out.

Bright pink background just dosn't work.