Opinion on these lyrics?

Question

My band is a pop band, we are hoping to be mainstream enough to get on the radio.

Here are the lyrics.

primeval god finally returns

comes a sound of triumph

I hear his voice

a dawn of evil prayer

a raise of million hands

revelation of our dreams

I open my eyes

I'm into the tomb

feel a touch of cool

carry beneath the gates

...and now lucifer comes

rides on the wings of winds

opens the gates of ancient towns

leads us to eternal delight

among the thousand flames

from dark to black again

his eyes are dark and cold

like northern frost

and icy breath

is a wind for the faithful

bring me there

where daylight never exists

and people live on gloom

bring me there

where I will be free

from god's tyranny

It's called Dark Triumph. Behemoth.

Answer 1

Awesome sorry about the hold up bro I was stuck on another?

Awesome hands down

Answer 2

Hmm, are you trying to reach out to the "tween" audience?

Because that's what it looks like.  Good Luck man!!!

Answer 3

The ".Behemoth" at the end kind of took the mystery out of it.

Answer 4

If you're a pop band it sounds kind of dark. When I think pop I think light, cheery. They are good lyrics though.

Answer 5

its cute,keep it up,i love it