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Opinion please?

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I know the clouds must shower rain

to grow a field of flowers.

Before we ever see the sun

we live through darkest hours.

And ever first must winter come

before each bloom of spring.

The melting ice a seed requires,

the rebirth it will bring.

Yet, lost in such confusion...

one thing I do not know.

I've searched behind the darkened clouds

and still cant find a rainbow.

It isn't in the coffe cup

I sit and drink alone.

It isn't on the other end

when I pick up the phone.

It wasn't in the shower

as i washed away my tears.

And it isn't in my memory

as I gaze back through the years!

I've weathered through the downpour,

I've suffered through the rain....

will there ever be a time

when rainbows shine for me again?

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  1. Wow. This is so beautiful. It gives you a really strong feeling of loneliness. This really made me feel and opened my mind. I'm a poem myself so I can appreciate this work of art you've created. Well done. Keep writing. =)


  2. That was really beautiful. You did a good job. Keep up the great work (h)

  3. .......  : )    .....

    yeach..nice!

  4. Suggestion: last line - meter sounds a little off - How 'bout just saying "when rainbows shine again" - and leave out the "for me" ♥

  5. woww so beautifull and nice poem

    and dont worry you will see the rainbows soon. ;)

    good luck

  6. Very nice and did enjoy it, easy read and well penned!!  Cheers !!!

  7. its sweet.... and sad. im sorry

  8. I really like your feel for rhyme, something I have problems with most of the time, especially when I try to write a more serious poem.  Thanks.

  9. Very nice. You have talent for rhyme and I like the way you ended the poem with a question. A poem is not a story; it doesn't need to have a happy ending--or any specific ending for that matter. Sometimes it's good to leave something to the readers' imagination.
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