Opinions and feedback on my poem please?

Question

You smiled when I told you,

That if you look at something for long enough,

Your eyes forget how to focus;

Everything just blurs

As if you've forgotten how to really see.

We laughed at this notion,

That familiarity breeds such contempt -

That it affects your sight.

You squeezed your eyes tight shut

And hid your face in the crook of your arm,

I held my breath until you emerged, blinking,

And told me that you wanted to look at me,

As though seeing me for the first time.

Answer 1

awww...that's a really cute image :)...i like it

Answer 2

this is very good indeed. It's the sort of poem you can only understand if you can relate to it. I like the style and the way you have strung the lines together to make it really musical.

Answer 3

nice poem...i liked it..

Answer 4

Wow! for the first time a peom that I not only understood, but also provoked thought. Brilliant! Well done. One read gives your one intepretation a fun situation, where as the second read gives you depth and emotional feeling of tenderness between two people.

Great!

Answer 5

I liked it,it moved me. Very sweet.

BUT it could be written in prose,therefore I don't know if,strictly speaking,it could be regarded as a poem.