Opinions/critique on my poem?

Question

I wrote this poem for a contest. Here's the link to see the poem (with it's corresponding picture) or you can just read it:

http://hs.facebook.com/photo.php?pid=1275989&o=all&op=1&view=all&subj=26905101702&aid=-1&id=618033034&oid=26905101702

(If you have a Facebook, I would really appreciate a vote!)

I see you: strong, beautiful, tanned - mine.

The words fly out before I know what I'm saying.

"I love you."

Blushing, flustered, sheepish, flushed red.

I watch you struggle for words,

Stalling and stumbling and sputtering.

For one-thousandth of a second,

The room is far too quiet.

I understand what you're trying to say, and I want to run.

I want to run far, far away.

To a place where I can never be hurt this way.

"I like you a lot," you say quietly.

My heart sinks into a swamp of unimaginable depth.

"Right," I respond, trying hard not to cry.

"That's what I meant to say."

Answer 1

It's not a poem, really.  It's more of a monologue of an awkward moment.